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@Allyssha Here’s the feedback revised in UK English:
Clarity in Numbers: The use of numbers is helpful, but it can be a little unclear. For example, what does "50/50(1)" mean? Consider explaining some of the numbers briefly to make the data easier to follow.
Consistency: The format you’ve used is organised, but it might help to keep it consistent throughout. For instance, rather than mixing terms like "middle(1)" and "50/50(1)", you could use "undecided(1)" consistently.
Key Insights: While the conclusion shows the numbers for each question, it doesn’t summarise what those numbers mean. For example, you could add a simple sentence such as, "The results show that football is more popular than basketball, and team play is strongly preferred."
Grammar: Some lines could be slightly reworded for grammar and readability. For example, "team(6) alone(1?)" could be written as "6 prefer playing in a team, while only 1 might prefer playing alone."
Overall, you’ve done a good job presenting the data, and adding a short summary of what the numbers mean will make your conclusion even stronger. Great effort!
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Criterion A: Inquiring and Analysing
Criterion B: Developing Ideas
Criterion C : Creating the Solution
Criterion D : Evaluating
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